Monday, August 15, 2005

Frequent Cause of Wordiness

A lot of essays end up with crappy sentences. For example:
"Perhaps, if he had not defeated Bosrot, he will not be destroyed in chapter 7."

It's wordy because the contractions were uncontracted. Let's contract it and see what happens:
"Perhaps, if he hadn't defeated Bosrot, he wouldn't be destroyed in chapter 7."

Smoother? It's because contractions are how we speak. Instead of changing our writing form to how it would sound better written, we merely uncontract and pretend we fixed the problem. Should've left them there, pansy ass.


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